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zysin5
02-20-2008, 06:56 AM
Nurture love and bury hate, hurry quick the time draws late. Eyes wide shut and watch your back, another evil in silence hatch. Open your eyes and open your mind, peace and joy only you can find. Swallow lies and profit loss, no thought of eternal cost, the magic lies inside of you,as long as you hold to what you know is true. False prophets spew thier sermons of fear, and we are all too blind to hear, the ones who now in control, have already sold your eternal soul?

mojo
02-26-2008, 05:41 PM
I liked it Z.

Would you mind one small criticism.

Too bad i'll tell ya anyway. :)

I would change "and we are all too blind to hear" to
"and we are all too deaf to hear".

Stupid i know but i'm extremely anal sometimes, otherwise excellent.

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